Talk:Maru (Heavenly Delusion)/GA1

GA Review

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Nominator: Tintor2 (talk · contribs) 00:57, 22 December 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: Boneless Pizza! (talk · contribs) 01:12, 22 December 2024 (UTC)

Will be reviewing this later. 🍕BP!🍕 (🔔) 01:12, 22 December 2024 (UTC)

• "and fellow character Tokio." - Add comma before Tokio
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• "He rejected coincidences related to magic and wanted to create a more realistic and accurate world to show what happens during a brain transplant. Another theme involves how relationships would change if somebody's sex changed." I don't understand this, can you perhaps reword/rephrase it for the readers who are unfamiliar with HD?
  • Rephrased. He wanted basically to make a realistic take of gender swapping without relying on supernatural elements
• "specifically the character Kon" - add a comma before Kon
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• " Maru important for the plot setting so they" add comma before so
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• "He also finds the character hilarious, especiall" - typo
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• " The duo continue their journey together though " add comma before though
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• "from Takahara who wants to challenge Maru" add comma before who
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• "Hirukos just like him.Moreover, Maru's design" - space before moreover
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• "The scene where Totori tries to seduce Maru also received Ishiguro's attention as he found it to be more erotic than in the manga.[25] In a chapter of the series, Maru uses his power to kill an enemy but under the name of "Fatal Dive". The comical aspect of this scene let to fans make their own doujin of the series under same title." - I don't think this is reception at all.
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• "Anime Feminist agreed Maru while enjoying the similarities" - what did the website agreed to Maru?
  • Rephrased
• Link Joel and Ellie
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• "IGN India agreed," - what did they agreed? pls specify
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• " sequence, Kiruko" - period not comma
  • Done 🍕BP!🍕 (🔔) 04:22, 22 December 2024 (UTC)

@Boneless Pizza!: I think I covered everything. Thanks for the review.Tintor2 (talk) 04:59, 22 December 2024 (UTC)

Tweaked some texts. Passing it. 🍕BP!🍕 (🔔) 06:20, 22 December 2024 (UTC)

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