Talk:Serekunda/GA1

GA Review

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Nominator: Vigilantcosmicpenguin (talk · contribs) 22:04, 5 September 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: Sammi Brie (talk · contribs) 17:56, 8 January 2025 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable, as shown by a source spot-check. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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Some copy changes, mostly. Your style tends to lead to lots of shorter, choppier sentences, which sticks out in a few places. The only real missing content piece, in my view, is something about education. Ping me when addressed. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 18:47, 8 January 2025 (UTC)

• @Sammi Brie: Alright, I think I've addressed everything here. — Vigilant Cosmic Penguin 🐧 (talk | contribs) 20:43, 8 January 2025 (UTC)

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Copy changes

• It may be worth pointing out that Serekunda's "city" size is relatively small. Looking at the Settlements table in Kanifing, there are five settlements with larger populations. Is that whole area commonly considered Serekunda?
  • Many sources referring to "Serekunda" actually refer to things outside of the settlement proper. For example, the section on "Tablighi Jamaat" refers to Bundung as a neighborhood of Serekunda, since that's what the source says, but the census lists it as its own settlement. I'm pretty sure I read a source specifically stating that the term "Serekunda" may refer to the larger area, so I'll try to find that and add it in.
    • I'm going to hold on passing, Vigilantcosmicpenguin, until you tell me you can't find that source. It feels a little too important to glide over. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 00:55, 9 January 2025 (UTC)

  @Sammi Brie: Found it! The source lists four major towns that comprise the area known as Serekunda. — Vigilant Cosmic Penguin 🐧 (talk | contribs) 03:02, 9 January 2025 (UTC)

• I notice that the University of the Gambia article says it is in Serekunda but there is no section on educational institutions.
  • I looked for sources but they mostly say it's in Kanifing, so I put it in the article Kanifing. In fact, I'll remove the mention of the university in the "history" section here, since it'd fit better in the article on the university anyway.

History

• The street of his home was named Sayerr Jobe Avenue. "street of his home" sounds awkward. "street on which his home was located" perhaps?
  • Done
• The coup's leaders held covert meetings in the city. Jagne was arrested on charges of supporting the coup. He was released one week before the 1982 election. The NCP lost support due to the coup. Very choppy sentences in this stretched.
  • Rephrased
• I notice Serrekunda with two Rs is also an acceptable spelling; is there a reason it starts getting used midway through for parliamentary constituencies?
  • I presumed that the two-R spelling was the official spelling, but on second thought, the website of the municipality uses one R. I'll change it to the one-R spelling.

Geography

• Is there enough information available to create a climate chart like some U.S. and world city pages have?
  • Looks like the Gambian government does not have its climate data available on the internet like the US does. Also, the nearest meteorological station appears to be in Banjul (according to this government website).

Economy

• Sayerr Jobe Avenue has shops whose storefronts advertise to people walking or driving on the street. This feels almost banal or filler. Is there something noteworthy about it?
  • In hindsight, really not sure why I included this. There's already a mention of the avenue and its shops in the "Transportation" section, so this is redundant if not irrelevant.
• "A lot of" doesn't sound very encyclopedic.
  • Changed

Tourism

• Serekunda/Banjul Consider an endash instead of a slash: Serekunda–Banjul
  • Done
• Are there more updated figures than 2008?
  • No, this is the only source I found with specific statistics.
• I notice Visitgambia2 has complained about sex tourism mentions, but we also have a hefty El País article on it in the country. It's clearly still being discussed in the media.
  • The user was specifically concerned with the mention in the lead section, which they considered undue. But I agree that it's significant enough to be mentioned in the lead, given the coverage.

Sport

• The Gambia National Olympic Committee's Sport Infrastructure Initiative Project completed a mini stadium in Serekunda in 2001, which opened in 2007. This doesn't make sense: completed in 2001, opened in 2007?
  • The phrasing from the source: "[...] only two (Farafenni and Serekunda East) were completed in 2001 and opened in 2007."

Notable people

• A citation is needed for Mass Manga.
  • I've removed the section altogether, since it was added by someone without a citation. I was going to expand the section based on Category:People from Serekunda, but the majority of these articles do not cite the statement, and it's not super necessary to have the section.

Sourcing and spot checks

Reviewed: 6, 16 (having access troubles with sourcing), 18, 29, 34, 50, 56, 62, 80 (paywall)

• The first use of [6] should cite pages 139–142, not just 139. Semega-Janneh's name doesn't appear until p142.
  • Done
• No other issues I spotted, though these journal sources sometimes do not want to load for me.

Images

All the images appear to be libre licensed, including the ones for which Atamari seems to have requested and received permission from the photographers years ago.

• • I just realized the photos in the infobox are not in Serekunda. The previous photo of downtown Serekunda was replaced because it was outdated, so I'm changing it to a more recent photo of downtown. Sorry for making you review a different image at this point; I feel like I should've made this change earlier.
    • The replacement image is also appropriately licensed. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 00:53, 9 January 2025 (UTC)

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