Talk:Teddy Mitchell/GA1

GA Review

Passed. DaniloDaysOfOurLives (talk) 17:28, 20 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]

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Nominator: FishLoveHam (talk · contribs) 19:54, 15 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: DaniloDaysOfOurLives (talk · contribs) 02:30, 17 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Hey, I will be reviewing this page. I have noticed your other GA pages which are very impressive so I hope that I get to help you with this.

I will do a proper review after this, but I first wanted to address 6 potential issues that could be addressed.

1.) Casting and creation section: "Teddy, Harry, and Barney were set to arrive in the show later in June. They eventually made their first appearances in the episode airing on 26 June 2024" - I would recommend getting rid of "eventually" and merging the sentences together (e.g. "Teddy, Harry and Ted made their first appearances in the episode airing on 26 June 2024").

Not done I've removed "eventually", but kept the sentences seperate as one is about when they were TEASED to arrive, while the other is when they actually did. FishLoveHam (talk) 08:18, 17 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]

I would recommend removing the teased bit and still merging it as it is a bit redundant - If the months that they were expected to arrive was different, I would keep that in as it would show the delay in development/introduction etc but as it is the same I would just keep it to when they made their first appearances. DaniloDaysOfOurLives (talk) 17:21, 20 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]

2.) Stability - Technically there (very unfortunately) been an edit war on this article by other editors - however, this was over a week ago now and the issue has since calmed down, and it is only referring to the tiny Duration section and not any sourced content, so I highly doubt it will be an issue. Additionally, once 2025 begins the "2024–present" will not be an issue anymore.

3.) I personally believe that the Development section should occur before the "Storylines" section as the development - particularly the casting, promotion and characterisation - chronologically occurred first.

Not done I disagree unfortunately. The storylines provide context and, as a personal preference, this isn't a requirement, right?

4.) Regarding the development and reception - I think that it could be expanded to include the more recent development, such as Teddy's relationship with Sharon and his feud with the Panesars/Gulatis, and include a wider range of sources. There are various magazine articles and interviews - I am not sure if you have access to them, but I am happy to send you screenshots of them via Wikipedia email to help (I know that I have helped in providing offline sources for some of your other articles, so I am very happy to send you some as I know that the economy is hard right now and you may not be able to afford/want to buy magazines right now) :)

Not done I've scoured the web, and, aside from spoilers, there's truly nothing else I can find about his development. There hasn't been an interview with Manookian or anyone involved with the show which really discusses his relationship with Sharon thoroughly enough to warrant its own section as of now. The rivalry with the Panesars probably won't be revisited in the show, as Nish is on his way out, and there is similarly nothing to really use there. The article cites over 20 references, surely that's enough to pass WP:GNG. FishLoveHam (talk) 18:44, 18 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]
- Done FishLoveHam (talk) 16:22, 20 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  Great work! DaniloDaysOfOurLives (talk) 17:22, 20 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]

5.) This article could do with a couple of free images - I recommend Perry Fenwick. If you include information about Teddy's relationship with Sharon then it would make sense to include a picture of Letitia Dean too.

Done Thanks for the suggestion! FishLoveHam (talk) 18:44, 18 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]

You're welcome! DaniloDaysOfOurLives (talk) 17:22, 20 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]

6.) Lead: A.) I would recommend putting the casting info and characterisation first before the "His storylines have included" bit as, again, they chronologically occur first, and real-world info is the most important. Done B.) "search of his father Stevie Mitchell (Alan Ford), his discovery that Stevie had another family" - I would merge this together and maybe put it before the "his storylines include bit" (e.g. "Teddy was introduced searching for his father Stevie Mitchell (Alan Ford), where he discovers that he has another family" merge: Done Reorder: Not done I just feel like it flows better to include it in the storylines section, as i have already written he was introduced as the head of the New Mitchells. C.) Not completely essential, but I believe that "his protective nature over his sons" could be slotted somewhere in the characterisation section of the lead. Done FishLoveHam (talk) 18:52, 18 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]

When these are addressed I will do a full review (though do not worry about #2).

Please do not hesitate to contact me if you have any questions at all :) DaniloDaysOfOurLives (talk) 02:30, 17 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]

@DaniloDaysOfOurLives: I've addressed everything, thanks so much for the review! FishLoveHam (talk) 18:52, 18 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you so much and well done for the expansion! I still recommend merging the sentence in #1 but in the mean time I will pass it - Well done! DaniloDaysOfOurLives (talk) 17:23, 20 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Have spotchecked refs 7, 16 and 22 - no issues there. Will pass it now. Well done :D DaniloDaysOfOurLives (talk) 17:27, 20 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]

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