Talk:United States' Telegraph/GA1

GA Review

Passed. PrimalMustelid (talk) 06:30, 7 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]

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Nominator: Generalissima (talk · contribs) 06:01, 16 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: PrimalMustelid (talk · contribs) 00:56, 21 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Placeholder for review, comments coming in the weekend. PrimalMustelid (talk) 00:56, 21 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Full Review

"It was first published in 1814 as the Washington City Gazette by Jonathan Elliot..." The first section seemingly says that it was cofounded by Elliot and two other editors. Looking at the two cited sources here, Elliot was the only editor and news printer but was a cofounder with two associates (not necessarily editors unless stated otherwise). You should adjust the information in the lede and first section accordingly. PrimalMustelid (talk) 05:00, 25 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]
It probably wouldn't hurt to say that the British sack of Washington was part of the War of 1812 for context. PrimalMustelid (talk) 05:00, 25 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]
"the Jackson campaign indirectly purchased the newspaper." I don't think "indirectly purchased" is the right phrase here. Just say that Jackson, Eaton, and Lewis arranged the newspaper purchase for a future campaign or something like that. PrimalMustelid (talk) 05:00, 25 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]
"Either at the end of the second page or the top of the third began the editorial section, featuring a headline column or open letter, followed by various shorter editorial columns." The sentence flow is a little hard to follow here. PrimalMustelid (talk) 05:00, 25 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]
"Later important deaths were simply memorialized by the addition of black borders to columns, without expansive eulogies in the text." I don't really see an indication that this is a "later" thing. Also, I think that it should be specified to "deaths of important political figures." PrimalMustelid (talk) 05:00, 25 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]
It might be worth noting that the Telegraph never apologized for attacking Louisa Adams personally, but that's up to you. PrimalMustelid (talk) 05:00, 25 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]
"Green was heavily rewarded for his resolute support of Jackson during the campaign..." Rewarded how exactly? PrimalMustelid (talk) 05:00, 25 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]
"The paper's new anti-Jacksonian stance lost it the support of Jacksonian postmasters it had previously relied to circulate the paper." I'm guessing you mean "cost" and not lost, right? PrimalMustelid (talk) 05:00, 25 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]

@Generalissima Overall a good read, and I've basically already done a spot check. Let me know when you've addressed all of these above points, and then I can go ahead and promote the article. PrimalMustelid (talk) 05:00, 25 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]

@Generalissima When you're ready, let's continue this, please. PrimalMustelid (talk) 16:40, 2 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]

@PrimalMustelid: Apologies for the delay; implemented your suggestions. Generalissima (talk) (it/she) 06:03, 7 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Great, checked the revisions and the article looks good now. Passing, and good day. PrimalMustelid (talk) 06:29, 7 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]

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