The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.
Overall: @Imbluey2: Article is new enough. Hook is interesting. I made a few minor copyedits to the article. The article doesn't actually say anything about how the police were involved, so that should be added. The reader will be looking for the police connection. Also, the copyvio detector is at violation possible 49.5% with one of the sources, so some of the stuff highlighted in red there will need to be revised first. Just one more minor thing, I don't think Singapore needs to be bolded in the hook. I think it looks better as "that Singapore's first R-rated play was performed despite the police finding it "offensive"?" Nice work on the article! ~WikiOriginal-9~ (talk) 21:00, 5 December 2024 (UTC)
The nominator hasn't edited in a few days and didn't respond to the above. Asking if fellow Singaporean DYK regulars Kingoflettuce or ZKang123 can help out. Narutolovehinata5 (talk · contributions) 08:38, 12 December 2024 (UTC)
Sorry, I didn't receive the ping for some odd reason. Anyways, should I just add a footnote in the article explaining that the Entertainment licensing unit is now part of the police? I'll change the stuff that (potentially) violates copyright.
That will work but I think it would be better if the police part was added to the actual body in prose instead of just footnoted. ~WikiOriginal-9~ (talk) 03:07, 19 December 2024 (UTC)
Added it. As for the potential copyright violations, I don't know if I can decrease it much since the texts that are in "violation" are either common phrases or quotes from different sources. But I'll try Imbluey2. Please ping me so that I get notified of your response 12:38, 19 December 2024 (UTC)
Looks like the copyvio tool still doesn't like some of that stuff. ~WikiOriginal-9~ (talk) 03:21, 23 December 2024 (UTC)
@WikiOriginal-9: got it to 38.7%, which isn't considered a violation. Do you want me to decrease it further? Also, do you think the hook should have an image of the cast? It's in the article as external media but I believe it qualifies under WP: NFC
That still seems a tad high unfortunately. Could you reword stuff a little more and get it to under 20%? Also, only fully-free images are allowed on the main page. Non-free images are not allowed there. Thanks. ~WikiOriginal-9~ (talk) 18:06, 23 December 2024 (UTC)
@WikiOriginal-9: done. Imbluey2. Please ping me so that I get notified of your response 03:08, 29 December 2024 (UTC)
@Imbluey2 and WikiOriginal-9: the source just says that PELU found parts of the play offensive and blacked those out, not that they found the entire play offensive. Could the hook be updated to match? theleekycauldron (talk • she/her) 16:19, 30 December 2024 (UTC)
The 4th excerpt of the source says "it was only Chin's play [Details Cannot Body Wants] that was deemed "offensive" by the Public Entertainment Licensing Unit"" so I'm not sure the hook is wrong. Though the last excerpt also says "certain passages which were marked out by Pelu as "offensive", so if you want to revise it feel free. ~WikiOriginal-9~ (talk) 16:32, 30 December 2024 (UTC)
@Theleekycauldron: I don't mind to be honest, feel free to change it. Imbluey2. Please ping me so that I get notified of your response 02:45, 31 December 2024 (UTC)
Note that the nomination is already over two months old; as such, the nomination will be marked for closure if the issues are not addressed within a reasonable timeframe. Narutolovehinata5 (talk · contributions) 10:27, 3 January 2025 (UTC)
ALT1: ... that Singapore's first R-rated play was performed despite the police finding parts of it "offensive"?
@Imbluey2: Article is new enough. Hook is interesting. I made a few minor copyedits to the article. The article doesn't actually say anything about how the police were involved, so that should be added. The reader will be looking for the police connection. Also, the copyvio detector is at violation possible 49.5% with one of the sources, so some of the stuff highlighted in red there will need to be revised first. Just one more minor thing, I don't think Singapore needs to be bolded in the hook. I think it looks better as "that Singapore's first R-rated play was performed despite the police finding it "offensive"?" Nice work on the article! ~WikiOriginal-9~ (talk) 21:00, 5 December 2024 (UTC)
@Imbluey2 and WikiOriginal-9: the source just says that PELU found parts of the play offensive and blacked those out, not that they found the entire play offensive. Could the hook be updated to match? theleekycauldron (talk • she/her) 16:19, 30 December 2024 (UTC)
works for me :) theleekycauldron (talk • she/her) 03:14, 4 January 2025 (UTC)