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Lego Indiana Jones: The Original Adventures (edit | talk | history | links | watch | logs)

As of 6 January 2025, 09:53 (UTC), this page is active and open for discussion. An FAC coordinator will be responsible for closing the nomination.
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Nominator(s): Vacant0 (talk • contribs) 14:38, 2 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]

This is a 2008 video game developed by Traveller's Tales that covers the first three Indiana Jones films. While the Smash Hit FAC was still going on, I was working on getting this article to GA status. After it was promoted to GA in October, I submitted it for a PR and worked on improving the prose and sources. I believe that most issues have been resolved, therefore I'm submitting this for FAC! Vacant0 (talk • contribs) 14:38, 2 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]

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Comments from Z1720

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I made some copyedits to the article: feel free to revert if not helpful. Some comments below:

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  • "The design of puzzles was altered to fit the Indiana Jones franchise, but any mentions of Nazism were removed entirely, considering that Lego replaced the figures with similar ones in its Indiana Jones Lego sets..." Perhaps: "The design of puzzles was altered to fit the Indiana Jones franchise, but any mentions of Nazism were removed, entirely, considering that as Lego replaced the figures with similar ones in its Indiana Jones Lego sets..."
  • "The game was advertised at conventions, and a game demo, Flash Player web game, and computer-animated short film were published during the development." Perhaps "The game was advertised at conventions:, and a game demo, Flash Player web game, and computer-animated short film were published during the development."
  • "It was later made available on Steam in 2009." Delete "later": this is implied with the later date mentioned afterwards
  • "The Wii and Xbox 360 versions garnered praise; however, the PSP version was criticised for its puzzles, excessive loading times, and lack of multiplayer support." Perhaps, "The Wii and Xbox 360 versions garnered praise, but; however, the PSP version was criticised for its puzzles, excessive loading times, and lack of multiplayer support."
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Reception
  • This section is quite long. I think it can be reduced by combining the commentary and removing some quotes: if multiple sources agree with an assessment, they can be merged together instead of having a sentence for every source.
  • Along with the above, the section has a lot of "X said Y" formatting. I think this section can have confidence that, if multiple sources agree with a perspective, multiple reference can be used at the end of a general statement instead of giving every source their own quote or statement.
  • The "Console versions" section seems to jump around between different consoles. As a reader, it is sometimes jarring the amount of times the subsequent sentence will be about a different console. I think this can be resolved by dedicating paragraphs to specific consoles. While the fourth paragraph clearly focuses on the audio quality, the others I am less certain about.

Those are my thoughts. I hope this was helpful. Z1720 (talk) 03:53, 6 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]

All done. I hope that the Reception is better now. Vacant0 (talk • contribs) 09:53, 6 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]
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