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Buangkok MRT station

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I've listed this article for peer review because it has failed twice at FAC stage. I'm not so sure what's wrong with the article, given I have tried my best to clear up all the issues with it, and it has even gone through a GOCE. As advised from the previous FAC, I shall ping @Epicgenius:, @Premeditated Chaos: and @Mike Christie:, who had been involved in previous nominations.

Honestly, I'm immensely frustrated, given I never encountered this many issues before especially for articles larger in scope like Nicoll Highway collapse or North East MRT line.

I appreciate any thoughts by any experienced FAC nominator on this. Thanks, ZKang123 (talk) 01:03, 7 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]

EG

Sorry to see that the FAC has been archived. I'll leave some comments here later, pointing out issues as I go along, as if this article were still being nominated for FAC. – Epicgenius (talk) 01:23, 7 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Lead:

Para 1: "located near the road intersection of Sengkang Central with Compassvale Bow." - "Road" isn't necessary here.
Para 1: "The station serves the residential neighbourhood of Buangkok, as well as Buangkok Bus Interchange and Sengkang Grand Residencies – an integrated commercial and residential development." - I would rephrase this to get rid of the awkward endash. For example, you can use semicolons to separate the list items: "The station serves the residential neighbourhood of Buangkok; the Buangkok Bus Interchange; and Sengkang Grand Residencies, an integrated commercial and residential development."
Para 2: "Buangkok was one of two stations on the NEL that remained closed when the line began operations on 20 June 2003, upsetting the area's residents" - Do we really have to say in the lead that Buangkok was one of two stations? We can just say "Buangkok remained closed when the line began operations on 20 June 2003, upsetting the area's residents"
Para 3: "White Teflon sheets cover the station's two entrances." - I feel like we can say more about the station's design in the lead. For example, the fact that it has an island platform (which, weirdly enough, is in the infobox but not the prose), or the names of its architects.

Jumping down to paragraph 2 of the Design section, shouldn't "The new bus interchange opened on 1 December 2024." go into the history section?

More in a bit. – Epicgenius (talk) 15:56, 12 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]

PMC

With apologies, I don't intend to do a full PR for this. Since you pinged me and have expressed some frustration with the process, I will point out that many of the prose issues I identified in the first FAC for this article are also present in North East MRT line but weren't noted at that article's FAC. Unfortunately, that article passing without those issues being identified may have given you the impression that they were not a problem. I can see why you would be frustrated by that, but clarity of prose is important and shouldn't be overlooked just because it was in a previous FAC. I've made some minor copyedits to the NEMRT article, just to give you an indication of what I'm talking about. ♠PMC♠ (talk) 05:48, 8 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]